Not to be critical, but I must wonder what exactly this sentence is trying to say because it is very unclear. The message that is trying to be represented comes off in an obscured and vague manner. It is too generalized. It is hard to know what the writer is saying. But I have no right to judge because every writer's style comes off as different and unique. There are just ways to better oneself in prose.
I can assume that the writer is trying to convey how many powerful and logical descriptions can stem off of a specific idea. For instance, when suggesting a child's energy is like a rabbit, words like hyperactive, bouncing, excited, bountiful, and playful can be perfectly suited. But this is my assumption. Who knows what other people assume when they read this sentence. The proficiency is not high, but with a few changes, it could become rich in meaning and communicating. Everyone makes errors in writing. But with some adjustments, a reader does not have to scratch their head and mutter " Huh?"
I like the image of the reader scratching her head in wonder. You see how such vagaries do not serve a reader well. Readers appreciate explicit, direct writing, yes?
ReplyDeleteHey - is there a grammatical error here too? Is it one that is impeding the reader's comprehension?